feedback from examiner

The following comments came from our examiner on Friday. Some titles need altering to show a debate/avoid narrative etc. ...see her comments in capital letters below. Find me before Wednesday if you need help to alter your title. The examiner was pleased to see such a range of questions. We can send her altered titles on Weds.



THESE EIGHT SEEM FINE. THEY SEEM TO HAVE A DEBATE AND TO BE CENTRED ON TRAGEDY. DON'T LOSE SIGHT OF THE FACT THE MAIN GENRE BEING DEALT WITH HERE IS DRAMA (TRAGEDY BEING THE SUB-GENRE):
Does Shakespeare present Enobarbus to be more of a tragic hero than Antony ?
How does Shakespeare represent Enobarbus as the more honourable character in A+C?
Antony is presented as the only tragic hero in the play. Discuss
How is Antony ’s death presented as inevitable?
How does Shakespeare’s presentation of Rome and Egypt drive the tragic outcome of the play?‘A woman is at the heart of every tragedy’ How does Shakespeare’s presentation of Cleopatra agree with this statement?
How is Cleopatra portrayed by Shakespeare as the most tragic hero in the play?How does Shakepeare present Caesar’s victory over Antony to be inevitable?
THESE THREE ALL SEEM TO INVITE A DESCRIPTION OF AREAS OF THE PLOT. THEY DON'T SEEM TO HAVE A DEBATE OR BE EXAMINING DRAMA OR AN ASPECT OF TRAGEDY (THEY ARE CONTENT FOCUSSED ONLY). THEY NEED ROOTING IN DRAMATIC TRAGEDY:
How does Shakespeare show pleasure to distract from Antony ’s duties?
How does Shakespeare present the themes of duty and pleasure to be significant in the play?

How does Shakespeare present Antony ’s pleasure to intervene with his duties to Rome ?
THESE TWO MAY BE OK BUT YOU SHOULD BE VERY WARY OF THE IDEA OF ONE AUDIENCE HAVING ONE REACTION AS THIS GOES AGAINST A FUNDAMENTAL ASPECT OF DRAMA AND ITS CHANGING CONTEXTS - IT MIGHT BE BETTER TO ASK ABOUT THE CREATION OF TENSION, PACE, ANTICIPATION, ETC, I.E. THEIR ROLE IN AN ASPECT OF DRAMATIC STRUCTURE/TRAGIC MOMENTUM:
How does Shakespeare’s presentation of Enobarbus affect the audience’s perception of A+C?
How does Shakespeare’s presentation of Cleopatra affect the audience’s perception of her character?
THESE FOUR MAY BE A BIT VAGUE:
How does Shakespeare’s presentation of honour affect the tragedy of A+C? IS EVERY SINGLE ASPECT OF TRAGEDY GOING TO BE TREATED HERE? TRAGEDY FOR WHOM OR WHAT? SEEMS VERY BROAD/GENERAL. DEFINE WHICH PARTICULAR DEBATE ABOUT TRAGEDY THIS ISSUE IS DEALING WITH.
How does Shakespeare present the theme of honour in A+C?
How does Shakespeare present death in A+C? BOTH OF THESE ARE DESCRIPTIVE AND VAGUE. NO DEBATE HERE, NO SENSE OF DRAMA OR TRAGEDY.



How does Shakespeare present less significant characters in the play to be more honourable than their masters?
UNCLEAR WHAT RELEVANCE TO TRAGEDY OR DRAMA CONVENTIONS.
All tasks need to be leading in some way to a debate not just about a character or presence of a theme, or as though the texts were just novels, but about aspects of drama (texts as specifically plays) and aspects of tragedy.